There's a good reason for having a bonsai look like a bonsai, and this thread is demonstrating once again that the trees ALWAYS need space for the birdies to fly through. You are supposed to style a tree with branches arrayed as a spiral staircase. This not only looks "tree like", it insures that the branches above do not shade the branches below. The Rule is: Each ascending branch is rotated 132.5 degrees about the axis of the trunk, and is high enough above lower, previous ranks so that there is distinct, visible air space of at least one leaf's length. This imitates the way nature arranges petals in the tiny buds of flowers and clusters of leaves so that as they expand and lengthen they emerge in an arrangement casting the least shade possible on the earlier unfolding leaves and petals. The shape of the leaves and petals is also reflected in that ultimate spacing in nature. Long petals and leaves have correspondingly long internodes which NOT coincidentally act to cast as little shade on fellow petals and leaves while attaining the greatest amount of exposure to sun and air for leaves and visibility for flowers.
Go out in the garden and confirm this Golden Arrangement for yourself. See how nature packs huge volumes of leaf and petal surface area into teeny tiny buds. See the progression as they go from packed tightly in that little ball, but grow into this very orderly arrangement. Again, notice that the distance between internodes is a function of the length of one cluster of leaves or flowers.
The OP tree is helter-skelter with no space for the birdies to fly through. If you want to create a tree with no internal leaves which die because they are shaded by new leaves, you're well on your way...